Talk:Opah

Notes for this article

complex words: deep-bodied, occur, single, temperate, specimens, rarely, recreational, anglers, prized trophies

Instead of saying where they "are found", say where they "live".

"One species are found" -- subject/verb agreement (singular subject, plural verb)

Link these: family, species

--Auntof6 (talk) 09:45, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

Removed some complex words, linked some other words, reworded areas. Angela Maureen (talk) 12:04, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

I've struck out the ones that are taken care of. Other notes:

• There are still some complex words.
• In this case, "family" doesn't mean what the link you added goes to. Link the taxonomic term instead.
• You changed the meaning on the sentence about the one genus and two species. Try that again.
• Don't include tropics and temperate in the same link -- there's a separate article for temperate zones

--Auntof6 (talk) 19:49, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

Got other complex words taken out. Anything else? Angela Maureen (talk) 21:06, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

You can't always just take out complex words, because sometimes that changes the meaning. Examples of that here are taking out "temperate" and "recreational". Taking out "temperate" gives an incomplete picture of where the fish lives. That's not necessary because we have an article you could link to on temperate zones. Taking out "recreational" makes the sentence mean that the fish aren't often caught by anyone, whereas the original article didn't say that. This is the kind of thing I've talked about before, when I talked about needing to understand an article fully to be sure you don't change the meaning when you simplify. Please figure out a different way to address those complex terms. --Auntof6 (talk) 23:11, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

Readding recreational and temperate; linked both terms. Angela Maureen (talk) 23:23, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

The one for "temperate" is good. You've linked "recreational" and "anglers" together. They shouldn't be together. The link you used, "fishing", applies to "anglers" but not to "recreational". Even with the link, though, "anglers" needs to be simpler. You also haven't fixed the part about changing the meaning in the sentence about the species and genus. --Auntof6 (talk) 23:31, 6 August 2014 (UTC)

Separated anglers and recreational, and linked them both, though I'm gonna need help regarding the species-genus sentence. Angela Maureen (talk) 00:40, 7 August 2014 (UTC)

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OK, take a look at the changes I just made. Do you understand each one? --Auntof6 (talk) 03:58, 7 August 2014 (UTC)

Alright. I understand. Changes are accepted. Angela Maureen (talk) 04:12, 7 August 2014 (UTC)