Talk:Albatross

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• "but their fossils found there" "their fossils have been..."

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• Explain IUCN before using the abbreviation.

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "19 of the species are endangered." no need to repeat "of the species" here.

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "When they come near to the hooks" perhaps "When they get too close,... "

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• What's a "hind toe"?

 Fixed to "last toe" Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• don't ->do not (avoid contractions)

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "The wings largest albatrosses" doesn't make sense, maybe missing "of the"

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "take a clockwise way," I'm not sure what this means.

 Not done It means that it turns to the right, goes down, and goes up left again. I'm sure you know how a clock goes. Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

Fixed by dear Chenzw (talk · contribs). Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 00:25, 25 May 2010 (UTC)

• take off or take-off, be consistent.

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "wing take lift" it makes lift, not takes it.

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "A map of the places where albatrosses live in." remove "in" and explain what the colours mean.

 Fixed Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• "Albatrosses can dive to below 12 m." convert (as you have converted other lengths)

 Not done per enwiki Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

• Why not? The enwiki article is in no way perfect. Even enwiki FAs may have some minor faults. Pmlineditor ∞ 11:21, 9 May 2010 (UTC)

I agree. But I don't exactly know how to do the convert template; if you really don't think it's agreeable (though I don't think it makes much difference from the outside), I can undo all the other convert templates and make them all numbers. Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 11:24, 9 May 2010 (UTC)

• "can dive as deep as 12.5 m" ditto.

 Not done per enwiki Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

That's half. The Rambling Man (talk) 13:10, 7 May 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. Please tell me if I fixed any of them in a wrong way. Belle ^{tête-à-tête} 05:10, 8 May 2010 (UTC)

Ordered information

Albatrosses are very large. The bill is large, strong and sharp. This bill is made of horny plates. Along the sides are the two "tubes". They are actually long nostrils. The tubes of all albatrosses are on the sides of the bill. They help the albatrosses develop their sense of smell a lot.[2] The feet have no last toe and the three other toes are all webbed. Their legs are quite strong, and they can walk well on land, unlike other sea birds.[3]

Albatrosses need to take salt out of their body because they drink ocean water. All birds have a large gland at the top part of their bill, above their eyes. This gland is sometimes useless to birds that do not need it. However, albatrosses use them to help take out saltwater. Scientists are not sure how it works exactly. However, they know that it helps take out the salt. It makes a liquid that makes the saltwater drip out of their nose.[4]

The adult albatrosses usually have a dark upper-wing and back, and white undersides when they are getting ready to take flight.[3] Albatrosses take several years to get their full adult feathers.

The wings of the largest albatrosses (genus Diomedea) can be up to 340 cm (11 ft).[5]

This whole section needs rewriting, in order to put the horse before the cart. You tell me a great deal about the bird's beak before you have given me any idea at all about the structure of the bird itself. Once you start a major description, don't get distracted with side issues such as the nostrils and a particular gland.

• First, tell what this bird looks like, so that I can recognise one, and tell it from a seagull or a Bald Eagle.
• Then give me the size variation between the Great Albatrosses and the Sooty Albatrosses, which is considerable. The length of their wings is an important feature.
• After that, launch into the detailed description of the different parts.

There is a statement somewhere there that the wings lack muscles and energy. This is not the right way of saying it. Please fix.

Amandajm (talk) 07:29, 31 May 2010 (UTC)