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|This article contains a translation of Dan Kelly (bushranger) from en.wikipedia.|
Quick scan[change source]
This can scarcely be called a GA review, it's so short and inadequate. :p However, I do have a few comments to make:
- The prose flows generally well and is neutral without being overly dry and boring - it's really admirably written. :) It's also simply and clearly written. I think it's ready or nearly so to be a GA except a few very minor issues, some of which I have fixed.
- Ref 13 comes up as "not found", and so does this link in the "Other websites" section.
- ...New South Wales to look for seasonal farm work <- It would be nice if seasonal could be linked (maybe to "season").
- The bush seems to have been linked twice (first time in "early life", second time in the beginning of "kelly gang"). It should only be linked once in its first usage.
- Doneproblem fixed
VGA review[change source]
This is extremely well written, and certainly better than the corresponding article on English. I made a few small changes, mostly with sentence construction, spelling, and punctuation. Other than that, not much came up during my review that I feel needs correction or clarification. This is what I do have:
- The empty space under the "Early life" section heading should be eliminated somehow, perhaps through tweaking image placement.
- "Dan took part with his brother in the killing of three policemen" - could this be better written as "Dan and his brother killed there policemen"?
- In Australian English, is "home made" (in the section "Murder")
two words or one? It is normally one in American English, but as this article is written in Australian English, for all I know, it may be different there.
- The sentence "To keep them happy, there was dancing in which both Ned and Dan took part" seems constructed a little awkwardly; is there a better way to word it? Kansan (talk) 18:39, 22 April 2011 (UTC)
Vocabulary looks simple[change source]
I just did a quick vocabulary analysis and the vocabulary is quite simple. The only infrequent word that really stood out was "verandah"; quite common in Australia, but less so in other areas. I just went ahead and linked it, then created the page from EnWP. Looks like a great article. Gotanda (talk) 02:55, 23 April 2011 (UTC)
Early life[change source]
I'll put this comment here, because it doesn't change my view that this is a VGA.
The bit about the simple wooden house in Kelly Street belongs with Red moving to Beveridge... Actually, I'll do it, it's easier to do than say. Please revert it if it doesn't convince.
Also, 'several' means about three, not seven.
lacks neutral point of view[change source]
I think it focuses on arguments against Ned Kelly and his brother such as them being violent men who intimidated people but not the arguments for them like being targeted by the police for years and their welfare programmes for the poor as well as examples of the them being considerate.