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Ungrammatical English in this V.G. Article![change source]
"Kamikaze.... it is normally used to call the suicide pilots of the Empire of Japan, and their attacks on the ships of the Allied Powers in the final years of World War II. It is sometimes used by extension, to call any kind of suicide attack."
The English expression "to call" is not used like that.
It should say:
- ...it usually refers to the suicide pilots.
- ...it is the name often given to the suicide pilots.
- ...it is often used to mean the suicide pilots.
- ...it usually means the suicide pilots.
- ... it is used when people speak about" the suicide pilots.
It is not "normally used to call" them. If it is normally used to call them, than that means that their mothers put their heads out the door and yell "Hey, Kamikaze! Come and get your dinner!" ....Because this is how the expression is used in English. Amandajm (talk) 09:25, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
(Thinks: maybe this is some recent US usage that I don't know about.... maybe it's teenage talk I haven't caught up on.... maybe it is a regional dialect....)
- Smithsonian Networks external link is dead
- Delink dates
- What makes "Everything2.com" a reliable reference? J-aircraft.com? Warbirdforum.com?
- Cleanup the source tag in the lead
- Removed the statement, since I can't find anything to back it up and it wasn't in the version of the article when it was promoted.
- All book references need page numbers for a VGA, or they could be replaced
- The first paragraph under "Effects" could have a [source?] after every sentence; references needed
- I think 10 external links violates en:Wikipedia:External links, Important points to remember, point 3
- The lead fails en:WP:LEAD, because it doesn't talk about what Kamikazes are, just about etymology.
- The first three paragraphs of the "History" section are completely unreferenced.
- Hundreds of extra kamikaze planes were ready to defend Japan from the final invasion. What "final invasion"???
- Removed "the final" from the sentence.
- After the attack on Pearl Harbor on December 7, 1941, the Japanese Navy and Air force were defeated in several important battles, like Midway and the Philippine Sea. What made them "important"?
- They lost many ships (including nearly all the Japanese aircraft carriers), hundreds of fighter aircraft, and many of their best pilots. Estimation of ships? "Many" is too broad
- Overall, the article needs a copyedit to remove terms like the two above.
Fails on some big issues[change source]
This article is a very clear fail, and in some respects below the average work of many of our regulars today. As usual, I'll almost ignore the various minor points. I think quality of prose is the key ingredient of a very good article, and using the literature to check that all major points are treated in the article. The use of introductions and overviews is critical to non-specialist readers.
The introduction is a complete disaster. It's not simple, but much worse, it's English only in the sense that most of the words are English. The whole of this introduction addresses the word, not the concept. That's a big mistake, and a comment pointing this out was left on the talk page several years ago (and ignored). Even so, it's bad English: long, wandering sentences are hard to read. What is the author trying to say? That should always be clear to a reader; otherwise what is the point of it all?
The second paragraph introduces four more Japanese terms, which we don't need to know about, certainly in an introduction. The main strategic points relating to the war are not summarised in the introduction, which has no references at all. The introduction is possibly the worst piece of writing I have ever seen on a so-called VGA.
I don't like the constant use of Japanese characters in this article. There's no way most of our readers can cope with non-roman scripts, and (if used at all) they should be relegated to footnotes. I notice that throughout the word 'name' has been used in place of the accurate word 'term'. That's a false simplification, and reads strangely.
The rest of the article has detail, mostly from the Japanese point of view. There's relatively little about what the American commanders were thinking about. I know there's quite a lot of literature which goes into the broader issues. Why did the Japanese continued the war so far beyond the point where it could be won, for example. Was it felt that Kamikaze could actually stop the American advance? Well, the article does not have much of an 'overview'. The article has some perspective on the industrial potential of the two sides (which is welcome), but nothing that helps us understand this (to us) strange strategy. I look to a VGA to be comprehensive not just in facts and figures, but to include all relevant angles, at least in summary form. Whatever professional historians think is important should have a place. Macdonald-ross (talk) 07:47, 9 April 2012 (UTC)
Maintenance of GA and VGA lists[change source]
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