Talk:Log Cabin Republicans

Simplifying

The following complex words/phrases in this article need simplifying: advocate, declared, rallying point, opposed, attempted, equity, repeal, due to

--Auntof6 (talk) 03:34, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

I simplified most of the wording. Equity, however, is more complicated. Something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 04:41, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

Notes:

• Advocate does not mean stand for.
• Rallying point is an expression. It can't be simplified by just removing rallying.
• When referring to the organization, you need to use singular verbs in certain cases. For example, are an organization should be is an organization. LCR were should be LCR was. There may be other places that need to be changed.

Tax equity in this case would mean that domestic partners would pay taxes the same as married couples. --Auntof6 (talk) 05:44, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

I changed equity to paying taxes. I also changed other words. Something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 06:23, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

Comments now:

• The point about tax equity was that domestic partners should be treated the same as married people when it comes to taxes. The way it's worded now -- "domestic partner benefits (including paying taxes)" -- isn't right: it sounds like domestic partners weren't paying taxes at all, but wanted to. That's not what was going on.
• The section heading "Elections" needs to be changed. That section isn't about elections.
• Rallying point still needs to be simplified.

--Auntof6 (talk) 07:26, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

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I removed rallying point altogether and simplified other areas of the article. Angela Maureen (talk) 07:52, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

Leaving out rallying point changes the meaning. You have to find something to replace the term. In the part about domestic partners, you took out mention of taxes, but that has to be in there. Other issues doesn't really work as a section heading; why not include that in the history section? Just be sure to get it in chronological order. --Auntof6 (talk) 08:24, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

I should call for help. I'm having trouble finding replacements for rallying point and equity. Somebody better come and help me. Angela Maureen (talk) 08:45, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

I've simplified rallying point and equity. Is there something else or is the article ready to move to mainspace? Angela Maureen (talk) 23:08, 22 February 2016 (UTC)

The change for rallying point is OK. The one for equity is not. The issue is tax equity. You've separated that into two things: general equity and taxes. That's not what the original article says: the two ideas have to be together. --Auntof6 (talk) 00:23, 23 February 2016 (UTC)

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I've simplified equity and merged it into the two ideas on the article. Angela Maureen (talk) 03:14, 23 February 2016 (UTC)

I'm not sure that gets the right idea across, either. Maybe you could just leave out the part in parentheses and let "domestic partner benefits" cover it. --Auntof6 (talk) 03:18, 23 February 2016 (UTC)

I left out the part in parentheses and let domestic partner benefits cover it. Angela Maureen (talk) 03:24, 23 February 2016 (UTC)