Talk:Pablo Escobar

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This article contains a translation of Pablo Escobar from en.wikipedia.

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He is considered - passive.
- Fixed
offered - simple?
- yes
pay off - simple?
- Fixed
because he was charged - charge with what?
- Fixed
Should running water have an article?
- Probably, I don't know.
He smuggled a load - a plane load, or a lot?
- Fixed
all of Restrepo's workers were told that they - passive.
- Any idea here?
Escobar and several of his men were arrested - passive.
- Any idea here?
drug barons - simple?
- Linked, but no article to it yet.
The pilot could earn as much as £500,000 - Do we want to keep this consistent; all dollars, or all pounds. Maybe see WP:MOS.
it was measured that 70 to 80 tons of cocaine were brought from Colombia to the United States - is measured the right word?
- Fixed
Corruption characterized Escobar's dealings with the Colombian system. - does this make sense? Simple?
- Yes, it does. It is further explained in the next sentence.
This is often referred to as - passive
- Any ideas here?
The Cartel de Medellín was also involved in a deadly drug war. On the other side, the Cartel de Cali fought. - Not clear.
- Fixed

Yottie ^=talk= 14:25, 3 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, I've fixed most of the stuff. -Barras (talk) 05:56, 1 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]