Talk:Plastic wrap

Page needs simplifying

Here are the things that should be addressed:

complex words/phrases: film, adhesive, food items

"It keeps them fresh over a longer period of time." Longer than what?

grammar: there is making of plastic wrap using - you can't change "production" to "making" here without changing the rest of the sentence.

explain Saran Wrap

Divide sentences

--Auntof6 (talk) 05:12, 27 December 2016 (UTC)

I linked adhesive, changed food items to food, and film to material. I also changed making to production. Furthermore, I added a reference to the article. Anything else? Angela Maureen (talk) 06:30, 27 December 2016 (UTC)

I explained Saran Wrap. Angela Maureen (talk) 11:05, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

I don't see where it says what Saran Wrap is. I see a reference, but when I click on it I don't get get a valid page. Do you get a valid page when you click on it?

I divided the sentences. Are we ready to put this article back in mainspace? Angela Maureen (talk) 11:35, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

Almost. In addition to the note above about Saran Wrap, the second sentence refers to "them". That's left over from when the article mentioned "food items". Now that it mentions "food" instead, that sentence needs a singular pronoun. --Auntof6 (talk) 17:18, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

I changed them to food. I also explained Saran Wrap further. Is there anything else? Angela Maureen (talk) 18:11, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

You still haven't said what Saran Wrap is. You gave some facts about Saran the material, but that isn't needed and doesn't say what the product is. Ask yourself this question: what is Saran Wrap?

I'm not trying to be difficult. I'm trying to guide you toward being able to see things like this for yourself. If you have an idea of another approach would help you toward that, feel free to let me know. --Auntof6 (talk) 18:40, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

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I changed the explanations on what Saran Wrap really is. Is there anything else? Angela Maureen (talk) 04:46, 30 December 2016 (UTC)

I don't see where you say what it is. In any case, I really think there's too much there now. The main reason to include Saran Wrap at all is that it was made from a different material than the others mentioned. Also, there should be at least one reference. --Auntof6 (talk) 05:00, 30 December 2016 (UTC)

OK, I changed the description of Saran Wrap and reworded another sentence. Now I think it just needs a reference. You should be able to find one in the enwiki article. --Auntof6 (talk) 05:26, 30 December 2016 (UTC)

I've added a reference to the article. Are we ready?Angela Maureen (talk) 17:48, 30 December 2016 (UTC)