Talk:Shaft (movie)
Notes for simplifying/improving the deleted plot section of this article[change source]
Here are some comments, as requested by User:September 1988.
complex words and phrases: brawl, dodges, reveals, ensure, intended target, perception, pad, mobster
sentences need to be divided
link to dab page: bar
Numbers, such as "2", should be spelled out.
--Auntof6 (talk) 04:45, 28 January 2017 (UTC)
- I changed brawl to fights, dodges to avoids, reveals to tells, intended target to just target, pad to place and mobster to gangster. I also linked bar and spelled out 2. The sentences were divided. Angela Maureen (talk) 14:54, 28 January 2017 (UTC)
- I did a little more. Note that sometimes you have to rearrange a sentence to divide it. --Auntof6 (talk) 17:47, 28 January 2017 (UTC)