Talk:Shaft (movie)

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Notes for simplifying/improving the deleted plot section of this article[change source]

Here are some comments, as requested by User:September 1988.

complex words and phrases: brawl, dodges, reveals, ensure, intended target, perception, pad, mobster

sentences need to be divided

link to dab page: bar

Numbers, such as "2", should be spelled out.

--Auntof6 (talk) 04:45, 28 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I changed brawl to fights, dodges to avoids, reveals to tells, intended target to just target, pad to place and mobster to gangster. I also linked bar and spelled out 2. The sentences were divided. Angela Maureen (talk) 14:54, 28 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I did a little more. Note that sometimes you have to rearrange a sentence to divide it. --Auntof6 (talk) 17:47, 28 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]