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simplifying[change source]

Complex words/phrases (simplify, link, or explain): subfamily, feed on, vertebrate, invertebrate, carriers, adapted, vectors

Several sentences need dividing.

Meaning changed in the process of simplifying:

  • This article says all feed on vertebrate blood. Enwiki says most do.
  • This article says they are often carriers of the Chagas disease parasite. I don't see that in the enwiki article.

--Auntof6 (talk) 05:19, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I linked words invertebrate, vertebrate, vectors, subfamily. Which sentences need dividing? Angela Maureen (talk) 16:46, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
All of the sentences that have commas need to be divided. (That doesn't mean you can't have commas in sentences, just that the ones here with commas happen to need to be divided.)
You changed often to usually: that's an even stronger word, and I don't see that in the article, either.
By the way, please indent your replies one level more than what you're replying to, to make it easier to read the conversation. --Auntof6 (talk) 17:54, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I divided a few sentences in the article. Angela Maureen (talk) 18:09, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]
OK. I see that you divided the last sentence in the first paragraph, but I don't see any others that were divided. I see that you took the comma and some words out of the last sentence, but that doesn't divide it.
I also see that you changed "The bugs are usually carriers" to "Many of the bugs carry". I don't see anything in the enwiki article that says anything about how many of them carry the parasite, just that some carry it. I might be missing it, though: if you see something there, can you point it out to me? --Auntof6 (talk) 18:25, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I linked adapted and fixed the article somewhat. Is there something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 17:15, 30 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Is this article ready to return to mainspace? Angela Maureen (talk) 00:01, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I think it would be ready if you do two things. First, "feed on" could still be simplified. Second, divide the first sentence. You could make one sentence saying what they are, and a separate one giving the other things they're called. --Auntof6 (talk) 00:30, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I recently divided the first sentence. How can I simplify feed on? Angela Maureen (talk) 17:45, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I think this article is ready to return to mainspace. I've done almost every thing possible. Angela Maureen (talk) 23:09, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Is this article ready for the mainspace? Angela Maureen (talk) 00:05, 6 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]