Talk:Yang Guifei
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Hello Haoreima, good article but the sentences can be shorter a little. Things that are hard to understand like emissaries could be wikilinked or made simplier. In addition, I am unsure if Britanica can be deemed as a reliable source in general. Deferring the assessment on this one for now. Do try to simplify the article more in the time being. Thanks. And I still can't add your other article, the team haven't get back to me, just an update. Will update you further on the progress. Camouflaged Mirage (talk) 12:13, 4 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Camouflaged Mirage: Hello Sir! I simplified the article. I updated it. Please review again. Four Beauties was also submitted through the Fountain. Please review that too. Haoreima (talk) 11:46, 6 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Haoreima Still too complex, an example is "Whenever the noble women were invited to imperial meetings, even Emperor Xuanzong's highly honored sister Li Chiying (李持盈), the Princess Yuzhen, did not dare to take a seat more respectful than theirs. ". This sentence is way too long and should be simplified further. In addition, there are sentences that started with "And" too frequently, the entire article needs a proper copyedit. Camouflaged Mirage (talk) 07:58, 8 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Camouflaged Mirage: Thank you for your review. I improved the article further. Please review it once more. Please review Four Beauties also. :) Haoreima (talk) 08:55, 8 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Haoreima Thanks. Good enough for me, I passed this. The other I will need to defer as I am not the first judge who gave comments. Please also add a category at least as there are no categories here. Thank you for participating. Camouflaged Mirage (talk) 11:54, 10 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Camouflaged Mirage: Thank you for your review. I improved the article further. Please review it once more. Please review Four Beauties also. :) Haoreima (talk) 08:55, 8 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Haoreima Still too complex, an example is "Whenever the noble women were invited to imperial meetings, even Emperor Xuanzong's highly honored sister Li Chiying (李持盈), the Princess Yuzhen, did not dare to take a seat more respectful than theirs. ". This sentence is way too long and should be simplified further. In addition, there are sentences that started with "And" too frequently, the entire article needs a proper copyedit. Camouflaged Mirage (talk) 07:58, 8 December 2021 (UTC)