Talk:Yellow (song)

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PVGA comments[change source]

  • Plenty of redlinks.
  • "produce" in this sense is not simple.
     Fixed - Linked Goblin 10:15, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "song was released in June 2000." - where? UK or worldwide or other?
     Fixed Goblin 10:15, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "unrequited" is not simple.
     Fixed - I think... Goblin 10:15, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "musicscape" neither.
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • "the song thrust the band into massive popularity" not simple - maybe "the song made the band very popular"?
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • "covered" is not simple in this context.
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • Not even sure whether "debut" is simple.
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • "feeling generally inspired the song's main melody, consisting of a chord pattern, popped into the head of Chris Martin," simplish but not exactly simple.
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • Is "impersonation" simple?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • Or "supplemented"?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "song's concept" -simple?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "was made familar with the " could simplify this.
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • ". Nelson showed an interest in working with them after seeing the band perform live." maybe, Nelson wanted to work with them... ?
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • "The track was later mixed in New York." could use a ref.
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "an analogue 2-inch type tape"- what's that?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "was one of a couple of songs" - couple is colloquial.
    Would "a few" or "a group of" work? If not i'll just axe it. Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • Is "mimicking" simple?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • Link/create falsetto.
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • Link devotion?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "Despite its lyrical theme.." not simple.
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "most-aired" - means...?
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "a sing-along number" - explain.
     Fixed Goblin 10:49, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Nifky!
  • "British clubs, pubs and sporting events" clubs, yes, events, yes, pubs? Not easy for the rest of the world.
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • "organization's" - organisation please - British English in this article
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • "..has deemed the song .." - deemed? maybe simpler to say "... said the song..."?
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • Chart (2000-2001) - use and en-dash, maybe Chart (2000–01).
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • Peak Position ->Peak position.
     Fixed Goblin 01:27, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Juliancolton!
  • Don't mix date formats in the references. All ISO or all human-readable.
     Fixed Goblin 10:37, 2 November 2009 (UTC) I ♥ Fr33kman!
  • I think you've got a HEAP of redlinks to sort out if you keep the template there... maybe lose it for the time being?

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:55, 23 October 2009 (UTC)