User talk:September 1988

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Happy Birthday[change source]

Yellowjacket[change source]

Hi, Angela. This article needs some simplifying and copy editing. Here are some notes:

complex words/phrases: predatory, mistaken, lance, barb, throughout

The second sentence says "In other English-speaking countries". Other than what?

"known simply as wasps" - better to say that they're called wasps

They are located throughout" - located is used for things that are stationary, not usually when talking about the areas an animal is native to. A better way to say this is to say that they are "native to" the places, with a link to Native (ecology).

--Auntof6 (talk) 06:50, 17 February 2017 (UTC)

Cow killer[change source]

Angela, please simplify more when you adapt articles from enwiki. In this article, you not only left some complex words, you also changed the meaning in one place. The enwiki article says "Over 400 species occur in the North American southwest". You said "They are especially found in the North American Southwest." Those don't mean the same thing.

The enwiki article says "Mutillidae can be found worldwide". You said that they're native to planet Earth. If a species lives all over the world, you don't use the phrase "native to".

The complex words you used were: resemble, dense, scarlet, queens (in this sense), drones (in this sense)

Are you using any kind of readability checker? I'd like you to start using one to help you with this. Let me know if you need help finding one. Thanks. --Auntof6 (talk) 03:49, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

Two articles userfied[change source]

Hi, Angela. I just userfied two articles you created because they weren't simple enough.

User:September 1988/Executive Order 13769

complex words/phrases: admitted, suspend/suspended, resumed, indefinitely, directs, exceptions, exempted, dual nationals, pending, litigation, detained, revoked

Also, what does the term "on condition" mean?

I changed suspend to stop, admitted to let, directs to tells, revoked to taken away and detained to held. I'm looking for the meaning of on condition. Angela Maureen (talk) 05:35, 24 February 2017 (UTC)
The term on condition means "provided that" or "with the promise that".
Then I don't think it makes sense as used in the article. You might want to look at the actual text of the order to see what it says. --Auntof6 (talk) 06:13, 28 February 2017 (UTC)
I linked dual nationals using nationality. I also changed exceptions to exclusions. Angela Maureen (talk) 22:35, 25 February 2017 (UTC)
When you change "indefinitely resumed" to "for the time being stopped", you have to change the word order: "stopped" s/b before "for the time being".
You changed "exceptions" to "exclusions": exclusions isn't simple, either. --Auntof6 (talk) 06:13, 28 February 2017 (UTC)

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I removed exclusions; I also put stopped before for the time being.

I removed on condition due to it not making sense. Angela Maureen (talk) 07:14, 28 February 2017 (UTC)

User:September 1988/Executive order (United States)

complex words/phrases: issued, full force of law, overturned, lack

other notes: article doesn't say what an EO is, just that it's issued by a POTUS

--Auntof6 (talk) 03:01, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

I changed it so that the article now says what an executive order is. Angela Maureen (talk) 17:12, 24 February 2017 (UTC)
That's good, but complex terms remain. Also, I missed one because it was originally misspelled: statute. --Auntof6 (talk) 17:22, 25 February 2017 (UTC)
I changed overturned to reversed. Angela Maureen (talk) 22:44, 25 February 2017 (UTC)
"Issued" still remains. Also, "force of law" is still complex, even without "full". --Auntof6 (talk) 06:13, 28 February 2017 (UTC)

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Are these articles ready for mainspace? Angela Maureen (talk) 11:07, 27 February 2017 (UTC)

I removed force of law from this article. Angela Maureen (talk) 07:01, 28 February 2017 (UTC)