User talk:September 1988

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Yellowjacket[change source]

Hi, Angela. This article needs some simplifying and copy editing. Here are some notes:

complex words/phrases: predatory, mistaken, lance, barb, throughout

The second sentence says "In other English-speaking countries". Other than what?

"known simply as wasps" - better to say that they're called wasps

They are located throughout" - located is used for things that are stationary, not usually when talking about the areas an animal is native to. A better way to say this is to say that they are "native to" the places, with a link to Native (ecology).

--Auntof6 (talk) 06:50, 17 February 2017 (UTC)

Cow killer[change source]

Angela, please simplify more when you adapt articles from enwiki. In this article, you not only left some complex words, you also changed the meaning in one place. The enwiki article says "Over 400 species occur in the North American southwest". You said "They are especially found in the North American Southwest." Those don't mean the same thing.

The enwiki article says "Mutillidae can be found worldwide". You said that they're native to planet Earth. If a species lives all over the world, you don't use the phrase "native to".

The complex words you used were: resemble, dense, scarlet, queens (in this sense), drones (in this sense)

Are you using any kind of readability checker? I'd like you to start using one to help you with this. Let me know if you need help finding one. Thanks. --Auntof6 (talk) 03:49, 22 February 2017 (UTC)