User talk:September 1988
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Happy Birthday[change source]
|A very happy (belated) birthday, Angela Maureen! Hope you enjoyed your special day. StevenJ81 (talk) 17:40, 15 February 2017 (UTC)|
Hi, Angela. This article needs some simplifying and copy editing. Here are some notes:
complex words/phrases: predatory, mistaken, lance, barb, throughout
The second sentence says "In other English-speaking countries". Other than what?
"known simply as wasps" - better to say that they're called wasps
They are located throughout" - located is used for things that are stationary, not usually when talking about the areas an animal is native to. A better way to say this is to say that they are "native to" the places, with a link to Native (ecology).
Angela, please simplify more when you adapt articles from enwiki. In this article, you not only left some complex words, you also changed the meaning in one place. The enwiki article says "Over 400 species occur in the North American southwest". You said "They are especially found in the North American Southwest." Those don't mean the same thing.
The enwiki article says "Mutillidae can be found worldwide". You said that they're native to planet Earth. If a species lives all over the world, you don't use the phrase "native to".
The complex words you used were: resemble, dense, scarlet, queens (in this sense), drones (in this sense)
Two articles userfied[change source]
Hi, Angela. I just userfied two articles you created because they weren't simple enough.
admitted, suspend/suspended, resumed, indefinitely, directs, exceptions, exempted, dual nationals, pending, litigation, detained, revoked
Also, what does the term "on condition" mean?
- I changed suspend to stop, admitted to let, directs to tells, revoked to taken away and detained to held. I'm looking for the meaning of on condition. Angela Maureen (talk) 05:35, 24 February 2017 (UTC)
- When you change "indefinitely resumed" to "for the time being stopped", you have to change the word order: "stopped" s/b before "for the time being".
I removed exclusions; I also put stopped before for the time being.
- I removed on condition due to it not making sense. Angela Maureen (talk) 07:14, 28 February 2017 (UTC)
complex words/phrases: issued,
full force of law, overturned, lack
other notes: article doesn't say what an EO is, just that it's issued by a POTUS
- I changed it so that the article now says what an executive order is. Angela Maureen (talk) 17:12, 24 February 2017 (UTC)