User talk:Shirtsleeves

November 2018

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A trip to Nanjing

Nanjing Massacre Museum is a historical museum in [Nanjing],[China].Nanjing Massacre was happened in 1937.People were killed by Japanese's cold weapons.The Musuem was built in 1985 to mourn the dead and show the cruelty of Japanese.It often opens from 8:30 to 16:30.The Museum has about 120000 square meters and has Peace Park area,Exhibition area and Site Mourning area.The ticket of Nanjing Massacre Museum is free and many people visit here to learn the history.

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Nanjing Massacre Museum is a historical museum in [Jianye District] [Nanjing],[China].Nanjing Massacre was happened in 1937.The Musuem was built in 1985 and its Chinese name is "南京大屠杀纪念馆" to mourn the dead and show the cruelty of Japanese.It often opens from 8:30 to 16:30.The Museum has about 120000 square meters and has Peace Park area,Exhibition area and Site Mourning area.The ticket of Nanjing Massacre Museum is free and many people visit here to learn the history.You can get there by subway line 1 and 2.

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First, do NOT write on the Main Page. We talked about this in class. Do NOT do that.

Second, the Nanjing Massacre Museum is not "A trip to Nanjing". It's not "A Trip to Nanjing". It's the Nanjing Massacre Museum and Linda lee 7 already wrote about it. You need to write about a different thing. There's a list of topics here. Anything that still has a red link is fine.

Third, what you did write repeats its mistakes every time you copy it:

• Words are surrounded by spaces. Marks are followed by spaces.
• Every word of a name starts with a big letter. If it's called the Peace Park, it's the Peace Park. If it's called the Peace Park Area, Area will have a big A.
• The verb "to happen" can't be passive. Nothing ever "was happened". They just "happened".
• You need to be more careful about spelling or get a browser with a built-in spellcheck.
• You need to be more careful about countable words like museums, massacres, areas, and the Japanese. It's not "the 特别 ticket"; it's 所有的 "tickets".
• English readers can't understand a single one of your Chinese characters. You need to give them the pinyin. If you want to talk about what the words mean, you need to translate them.
• English doesn't usually use military time. It uses AM and PM. You can't say it "often" opens. If there are exceptions, you need to mention them.
• "Many" is too vague. Either give the actual number of visitors or don't talk about them.
• "Line 1" and "Line 2" are too vague. First, it's better to mention that you're talking about the Nanjing Subway. Second, you don't tell people which stop to use.
• Don't talk directly to the reader of an encyclopedia article. It's too informal.
• The Nanjing Massacre occurred from 1937 to 1938.
• Links are made by using [[two brackets]], not by using [one bracket].
• The name of an article is darker. You make things darker here by using '''three apostrophes'''.

Now, all that said, you still need to write about something else. — Mr Spear (talk) 16:26, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Lol

This is Jocelyn， Nice to see you Clifford.

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