Talk:1910 Cuba hurricane

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Review[change source]

  • Because of the storm's loop, some reports said it was actually two hurricanes. - Needs a reference.
  • In Cuba, the storm was one of the worst disasters in the island's history. - Needs a reference.
  • It is not known exactly how much damage the storm caused. - Needs a reference.
  • The lead doesn't need references, since this information has references later in the article. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • OK! As long as it is referenced later in the article, so it's ok. Barras talk 10:42, 13 March 2010 (UTC)
  • $1 million - Dollar is not worth a link?
  • a type of storm called a tropical depression formed - Tropical depression is not worth a link?
  • Added, but it redirects to another article. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • The storm gained strength while it moved to the northwest. - The storm became stronger while it moved to the northwest. Seems to be easier for me.
    Fixed. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • It then moved in a small circle - Is there a "s" on circle missing?
  • This is because of the loop it made in the Gulf of Mexico. - This was?
    I think "is" is best, but I'll play around with it. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • Key West - Seems to be a place and should then be linked.
  • The storm caused very bad damage in Cuba. - What is very?
  • crops - Should be linked as it isn't really simple.
  • like the city of Casilda - Places are normally worth a link.
    Added redlink for now. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • goods - I don't think this word is simple.
  • $250,000 (1910 USD) - I assume that in 1910 there was an other currency in the USA. This should be explained (link and article).
  • Reference 3: Barnes, p. 93 - What is this for a book and do you have an isbn code?
  • All book references should have an isbn code.
  • They do, in the "References" section. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

I think that's it. Barras talk 18:39, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I'll work on the rest shortly. –Juliancolton | Talk 18:49, 12 March 2010 (UTC)
  • Should Southeastern United States have a capital "S"? I would have thought it is a general area rather than an actual place requiring a proper noun.Peterdownunder (talk) 04:22, 13 March 2010 (UTC)
  • You could strengthen the notability of the opening by mentioning that it was the worst storm in Cuba's history, which is quoted laterin the article. Peterdownunder (talk) 04:22, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

VGA review[change source]

lead
  • After moving through Florida, the storm moved near the southeastern United States and moved out to sea. - Sounds a bit odd to me. There are two "move" and since Florida is in southeastern US, the sentence is a bit odd.
  • In Cuba, the storm was one of the worst disasters in the island's history. - In Cuba, the storm caused... sounds imo better.
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Meteorological history
  • The caption could be easier. Something like "The way the storm went" or something.
  • Link hurricane
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  • measured should be linked (to wikt:)
Impact
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Cuba
  • Link crops
  • Casilda is currently a red link. No redlinks on VGAs
Holliswood
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Florida
  • (1910 USD) - should be link to see the different to today's USD.
  • Other websites section can be removed since it is redundant to the first two references.
 FixedClementina talk

Looks good! -Barras talk 19:56, 23 July 2010 (UTC)