Talk:Tropical Storm Barry (2007)
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Based on a quick reading and a look at these figures , there is still a long way to go to make it simple enough. We should try for a Flesch readability figure of around 70. --Peterdownunder (talk) 02:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
- Done, simplified. Juliancolton (talk) 04:39, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
- It's looking better, well done. There was a couple of words, "extratropical" that need explaining for me, and "sinkhole" might need something. Makes me glad I've never lived through one of these storms. Peterdownunder (talk) 05:11, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Some comments for GA[change source]
Here are some things that struck me before I could support promotion to GA.
- Not sure how simple "quickly forming" is. quickly is fine, but forming?
- A number of recent articles link units such as mph, km/h etc...
- Don´t overlink Florida in the lead.
- 2 people, 1 surfer - two, one... numbers below 10 in text please.
- Is wildfire simple? Possibly link it.
- Link cyclone in the history section.
- Tropical depression definitely isn´t simple.
- Explain UTC.
- Is guardrail simple?
- "Enhanced Fujita scale" definitely isn´t simple and needs explanation.
- I would also not use Coord. as an abbreviation - remember this is Simple English Wikipedia.
- ficus tree could use a link.
- "The storm created several tornadoes..." there are only two listed. Should this say two tornadoes or should the list say that it is incomplete?
Comments for VGA[change source]
- "formed" is that Simple?
- "lost in a larger weather system." could use some work too...
- "low pressure" could be explained or simplified?
- "extratropical system entered New England. "Extratropical" means that the storm was no longer a tropical cyclone." - heh, here you're doing what is needed, but could you explain extratropical perhaps in parentheses after using it rather than a new sentence?
- In "Preparations" there are a number of locations which aren't linked, i.e. have no articles. I would expect some of the more major locations to have at least a few sentence stub?
- Same, for instance, with "Brevard and Volusia counties"...
- You could remove the Rain overall heading in the table (you already say "rainfall" in the heading for the section), then make the table sortable?
Last bits[change source]
- "a top strength of 60 mph" - is strength measured in speed? or could you just say "top speed"?
- SSHS is abbreviated in the infobox - there's no explanation on what it means expanded. I know the infobox is imported from en.wiki so that's how it is, but it's a little confusing as to its relevance.
- "1-minute sustained" (sorry i missed this before) probably needs an explanatory note - not sure it's Simple.
- "...an area of low pressure (a storm)..." any need for "area of low pressure" here on Simple?
- "Late on June 4, the extratropical system entered New England ("extratropical" means that the storm was no longer a tropical cyclone). " still not happy with (a) the fact we're not using wikilinks to explain complex terms and (b) we've got a reference in the 'wrong' place.
- Is "surge" Simple?