User talk:16chseld 109/sandbox

@16chseld 109: You've been busy with this article. Good effort at adding paragraphs and headings. A few things:

1. the first paragraph of any wikipedia article describes the topic and why it is important. It never has a heading over it. You'll need to remove the one you added.
2. Notes and References always go at the end. Move the heading and paragraph you put after this
3. Keep your headings brief and descriptive. Rephrase the one that is a question and shorten it.
4. all pictures should have a direct connection to something you've written about. Make the connection in your caption for the picture. If it is too much effort to make such a connection, remove the picture and find another that is a better fit.

Let me know if you need further help to make these changes. Swim123blue (talk) 05:29, 18 May 2016 (UTC)