User talk:16chseld 117/sandbox 2
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@16chseld 117: I see you re-wrote the paragraph. Good effort. Let's look at your notes to see the keywords you recorded to write it in your own voice and make necessary revisions. Whose sandbox is the one that everyone is adding to? Swim123blue (talk) 06:36, 20 May 2016 (UTC)