User talk:Heyx3/sandbox

KA Peer Review

Summary

Heyx3 has written a Simple English article on Real-time Ray-tracing. He describes its major types and uses, and compares it briefly to more traditional computer graphics.

Major Points

The author has multiple places where a term is introduced in quotes and then explained, such as "'real-time' _______explanation_______". I think this format should be changed. Instead, definition should be introduced and then followed up with what it is called. For example, rather than "'rays' (little beams of light)", the article should say "little beams of light, called rays." In general this speaks to another overall theme, the idea that complex English terms can be used as long as they are then explained in Simple English. I'm not sure whether this is ok via Simple English style. Maybe consider linking to the articles defining the more complex terms? Any place a further explanation is needed for an extraneous term, check to see if an article exists that can be linked to.

The Types section doesn't seem intuitive to a Simple English Wikipedia user. It isn't explicitly explained simply why each of these types exist, how they relate to the main topic of the article, and whether or not they're simply different uses or actually different types. As a whole, for the simple English article, think this: if I were a user who wanted to know what Real-time Ray-tracing is without understanding any of the underlying computational concepts, what pieces of information would I need to understand the topic in other contexts?

Minor Points

"only became possible more recently" should be "recently became possible".

Many links in the article are capitalized even though they are in the middle of a sentence, which disrupts the flow of reading. This can be changed with the syntax display, where display is the text the link will be displayed as.

Another thing to keep in mind is that even if vocabulary is simple, sentence structure might not be. This article could be slightly improved by splitting up large compound sentences to make it simpler.

Words such as "fraction" are probably not Simple English.

EA Peer Review

Major Points:

You should try to avoid using quotation marks. I do not think they are necessary. For example you can say “rays, which are small beams of light” instead of saying, “ “rays” (little beams of light)".

“Because they demand good performance, few games today use ray-tracing”. How does good performance correlate to games not using ray-tracing? Is it too expensive? Does it require too much time?

“Because they demand good performance, few games today use ray-tracing”. How do you know that? Explain why this is a fact.

“These effects are generally just for video games, as other types of 3D programs do not need to care about looking very nice”. Rephrase this sentence. For example, instead of saying, “looking very nice” you can say, “do not need to care about aesthetics/their appearance”.

There are some terms that should be linked to other Wikipedia articles to expand on the subject, such as: billboard particles and voxel cone tracing.

Minor Points:

Programmers, computer graphics and electronics should start with a lowercase letter even though they are links.

Voxel is not a simple English word. You should define it.