User talk:Mighty Wodan/Wijerd Jelckama

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GA review[change source]

  • Link military an maybe commander.
Done.Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is warlord simple?
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link Nephew.
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link fought to wiktionary
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • along his side Maybe change to with him.
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link Author and maybe make a page for Wopke Eekhoff
Linked both. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not sure if sturdy is simple.
Made page at wiktionary and linked. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is reportedly simple?
Linked. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • in the year 1490 Just put in 1490.
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • via Is there any other way of saying this?
Changed to by. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link knights
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Could be interesting to make the link Siege of Antioch.
Linked. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • homeland could be complex for some people.
Made page and linked. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • to rid isn't really simple.
Changed to liberate. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • when the tides turned against the rebels The tides in this meaning is complex.
Changed.Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Charles withdrew his support. When the Duke withdrew his support Repetition. Say When he did (this)
Done. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • made up Complex phrasal verb.
Changed to composed. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • sacked Not sure it's simple.
Changed. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • forged Simple enough?
On second thoughts, it is. Same in French (forger une alliance). Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • took place Phrasel verb, maybe use happened.
Changed and linked to wiktionary. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • blows is this context isn't really simple.
Linked. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • extremely Even though it seems simple, wouldn't very be better?
Changed. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 21:06, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I've seen for the moment. Also, some sentences are quite long, I'll try and make them shorter. Yotcmdr =talk to the commander= 20:25, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comments. I hadn't noticed these things; I am no native speaker of English so I sometimes find it difficult to find the right words. If you have the time, I would appreciate it if you would help me out here. It is quite a list you came up with in such a short ammount of time, but I am sure it is nothing that can't be fixed easily. Mighty Wodan (talk) 20:30, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

More GA review[change source]

  • Some dates are linked some not. I think unlink all.
  • Why is "Arumer Zwarte Hoop" in italics?
  • occupied easy?
  • Reference one, two, five and six should have an ISBN number
  • Reference 4 should be fixed (accessdate, etc)
  • What is reference 9? A book. This cite is a bit odd

That's all now. Barras (talk) 18:03, 25 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Active voice[change source]

We could make the first sentence in Wijerd_Jelckama#Death more active if we knew "who" captured him. "So and so captured...". Unfortunatly, I have a hard time translating the reference. Any help? :) Best, NonvocalScream (talk) 01:10, 11 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

He (Jelckama) was captured after losing a battle. He was greatly outnumbered (most of his soldiers had already been killed in previous battles) and did not stand a chance. It was a Habsburg army, a Landsknecht Regiment (Black Band) to be precise. Ironically, this regiment was the same Black Band that his uncle was after to avenge the death of his wife and son by their hands. Mighty Wodan (talk) 06:13, 12 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
So the "Habsburg army" captured him? Best, NonvocalScream (talk) 00:59, 13 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, they captured him. Hope that helps. Mighty Wodan (talk) 06:22, 13 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]


It does, I'll reword later. :) Thanks, NonvocalScream (talk) 11:38, 13 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. Mighty Wodan (talk) 11:55, 13 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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