Talk:Hyderabad, India

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Basic review[change source]

  • Either over 4 mil people, or 3.6mil people. Or 3.6 in the city proper, and more than 400.000 in the urban area?
    X mark.svg Not done 3.6mil in city, 4mil in urban area. Pmlineditor  08:03, 4 October 2009 (UTC)
  • A-1 as development priorities: i have no idea what that means, others probably don't either.
     Fixed Linked. Pmlineditor  06:21, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

History[change source]

  • Generally too colloquial for my liking. First sentence: The city of H is considered to be over 400 years old; Archeologists have found.... This would make for over 2.500 years of settlement in the region (paraphrasing)
     Fixed Pmlineditor  07:41, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
  • Many of the terms need linking (Iron age, for example), bjut also the various people mentioned
     Fixed Pmlineditor  07:41, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
  • Till 1947 -> Until 1947. That sentence is incomprehesible, so should probably be rephrased.
    Split the first two parts into sentences of their own. Remaining sentences (The Nizam...) still incomprehensible.--Eptalon (talk) 07:50, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
     Fixed Pmlineditor  08:44, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
  • Work on capitalisation: British, Pakistan, are just examples for words that are usually capitalised
     Fixed Pmlineditor  06:29, 4 October 2009 (UTC)
  • Most words in English have a definite (the) or indefinite (a,an) article. There are a few passages where it is lacking
    I'm working on copyediting the section which has been written poorly. I'll do it by today. Pmlineditor  07:41, 3 October 2009 (UTC)

Other things[change source]

  • Sections with 3-4 sentences look a little short, so make the sections longer, or combine several of them into longer one
    Pictogram voting wait.svg Doing... Pmlineditor  09:57, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
  • The article is over-referenced; for an article this length I would not expect more than 10-15 references.
    X mark.svg Not done Refs are always nice. ;) Pmlineditor  08:20, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
    Then make the article longer... :)--Eptalon (talk) 09:05, 3 October 2009 (UTC)
  • Visually, it looks a little short to me, but I know its almost 15k before deductions, so proably long enough.

All of these are just random comments, nothing like a formal review.--Eptalon (talk) 19:59, 2 October 2009 (UTC)

Concerns[change source]

I don't think this is GA-quality. And here's why.

  • Dead links per this.

Fixed.

  • Far too many red links, even for "just" a GA.
  • 3 disambiguation links (development, English, groundnut).

Fixed.

  • MOS problems:
    • Mixture of date formats in the refs.
    • 2000 -> 2,000 etc.

Done.

    • 4 million -> four million.
  • Typo: Banglore.
  • What's referencing all the info in the infobox?

Stepping through (very quickly) line-by-line:

  • What's the point of referring to something that I don't understand with a red link (i.e. A-1 city).
  • "to the Ramoji Film City " needs linking.
  • Grammar fail: "which has of over 2000 acres (8.1km2) of land and"
  • "tell us about the ideas during Iron Age" what??
Rewritten.
  • "The rise of International Airport and real estate has a major impact " again, please use English grammar here.
  • "The area has many official buildings and that area is very old" poor English.
  • "From the recent time, Hyderabad has been merged with Secunderabad. This has led a large, united and populous city with many villages surrounding it.[" again, needs copyedit.
  • Mix of metric and imperial measurements. Use one and provide conversions to the other.

It's also, in general, light in contents. Look at the en wiki article, you'll see masses of sections which aren't even mentioned here. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:11, 24 April 2011 (UTC)