Talk:SpaceX Starship
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Good (or "good enough")?
[change source]- " It has a first stage named Super Heavy, and a spacecraft named Starship. Both stages ".
The words are simple, however can this text be improved? 89.8.125.206 (talk) 08:57, 28 October 2021 (UTC)- I just make it as a list, so that this chunk of information is easier to read. Thanks for spotting it out! CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:14, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
- "crushed itself".
The first time this is mentioned, it needs a precise explanation (perhaps: "the outside forces become so great, that the structure implodes (or crushes))". Thereafter in the wiki-article, I see some advantage in using the simple phrases: "crush itself"/"crushed itself". 89.8.102.224 (talk) 10:12, 12 November 2021 (UTC) - "As of October 2021, SpaceX again skipped some Starship and Super Heavy."
Something seems to be missing - I am not sure if adding the word "missions", will make things right. 89.8.102.224 (talk) 15:34, 12 November 2021 (UTC) - "to see Starship entering the atmosphere".
Comment: It/they are already in the atmosphere. "To enter the atmosphere" is only used about a spacecraft coming from outer space and into the Earth's atmosphere. 89.8.165.189 (talk) 15:36, 28 January 2022 (UTC)
New changes
[change source]@CactiStaccingCrane: I think the article's language might be a little too simple Nigos (talk | changes) 06:11, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- Agreed, will yeet it and build it again lol CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 06:14, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- ... What is the name of this wikipedia? We should simplify it as much as possible until the point that:
- phrases are repeatedly used to explain a singular word
- information held in complex words are lost due to lack of detail
- the article size massively increases due to phrases instead of singular words replacing complex words
- These are self made observations, and I think the article is actually more complex than it needs to be. Try stuffing it into a reading scale and ideally aim for grade 5. No less, no more.
- 💠Ely - Talk💠 06:17, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- Agree, it is time to nuke the article and build it again I guess :) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 06:22, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- @Elytrian Do you think the lede is good now? CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 06:42, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- That's true, I guess it should be simplified more then Nigos (talk | changes) 14:25, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- Agree, it is time to nuke the article and build it again I guess :) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 06:22, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- Should SI units be in front of US imperial units, or should the US units be in front? Nigos (talk | changes) 14:25, 24 December 2021 (UTC)
- SI in front. Lede is good. 💠Ely - Talk💠 06:10, 27 December 2021 (UTC)
Infobox (not accurate)
[change source]"Launch history
Status
Building or structure under construction ". 2001:2020:307:955C:DDA7:4EB4:2357:CE78 (talk) 16:40, 25 April 2023 (UTC)
- Done. Text has been removed. 2001:2020:32F:ECE9:950F:A575:93E6:A963 (talk) 21:05, 29 April 2023 (UTC)
Moved to discussion
[change source]"As of October 2021, SpaceX again skipped some Starship and Super Heavy. They are SN16, SN17, SN18, and SN19."--This is at least partially in error.--Flights and test flights will be done by notable spacecrafts, while some spacecraft will not make the cut, for whatever reason. 2001:2020:307:955C:1CCB:CB10:98D3:FC25 (talk) 19:22, 25 April 2023 (UTC)
Starting the article on the right foot?
[change source]"Starship is a rocket made out of stainless steel by SpaceX, a company that works in the atmosphere and space".--Please anyone, make the start of this article, good enough. (I will be looking at other challenges, in regard to the article.) 2001:2020:32F:A3C0:ACBF:8E7A:4CE9:D57A (talk) 15:09, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
A partial suggestion of what can be said: "... a company that builds and sends rockets between Earth and space". 2001:2020:32F:A3C0:ACBF:8E7A:4CE9:D57A (talk) 15:14, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
- Done. (Thanks to user:Angerxiety). 2001:2020:32F:A3C0:80E:FC2C:BB98:750A (talk) 18:25, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
Attribution
[change source]I have copied a table from en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=SpaceX_Starship_orbital_test_flight&oldid=1151856055. 2001:2020:32F:A3C0:80E:FC2C:BB98:750A (talk) 18:18, 26 April 2023 (UTC)
Please remove (if no one has idea how the text should be improved)
[change source]The Space Shuttle could only carry 27.5 metric tons (61,000 lb) to the International Space Station, however.[1]
[Needs fixing or removal from article:]
In this example, the International Space Station has an even lower orbit than Starship.
{{Efn|The International Space Station orbits 407 km (253 mi) high at 51.64° inclination. Starship in this case orbits 500 km (310 mi) high at 98.9° inclination.[2]
Comment: I will be busy looking at other challenges in this article. 2001:2020:32F:ECE9:A9F9:2DBE:10B2:FD03 (talk) 17:02, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
Refs
[change source]- ↑ "Inertial Upper Stage". Rocket and Space Technology. November 2017. Archived from the original on August 7, 2020. Retrieved June 21, 2020.
- ↑ Cite error: The named reference
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2001:2020:32F:ECE9:A9F9:2DBE:10B2:FD03 (talk) 17:02, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
"evaporates the heat"
[change source]I would like a second opinion, that those 3 words are unlikely to be a good fit.--Afterwards, anyone or myself, can try to knock that into better shape. Thanks, 2001:2020:333:F9E3:950E:B686:7096:338E (talk) 20:53, 14 March 2024 (UTC)