Talk:Star Wars

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The repetition of "culture/religion" over and over again in the article is not clear and needs to be changed. Try reading it out loud to get an better idea of how using something/other hurts the clarity and readability of a sentence. Greater clarity can be achieved by choosing one or the other after first explaining. I realise people often want to do things by consensus but the writing style needs to be be more decisive for the greater benefit of readers so I'm making the change and leaving a clear explanation here just in case. Also for readability it is better to write something or other rather than using the slash as punctuation. -- (talk) 14:23, 31 October 2008 (UTC)