User talk:CocoHuang4

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Xuanwu District

Thank you

for writing about something that you saw in Nanjing. You should not have written about it again on Felixcream's talk page. Why would you do that? — Mr Spear (talk) 13:41, 28 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Things I fixed

To help as an English teacher and to make your writing better, I fixed the mistakes that you made. If you want see each change that I needed to make, you can see them here. The big ideas are:

Use the first sentence to say what the thing is and where it is: Xuanwu District is a district in Nanjing, China.
You need to answer those questions, but you don't write the questions themselves. You just answer them.
Names start with a big letter. You did this for almost nothing in your article.
Use sentences with verbs for everything you say.
Don't join sentences with a comma.
End sentences with a mark.
The district was named for Xuanwu Gate, not "by xuanwu".
"is one of modern international humanities green logo area of nanjing" isn't English, makes no sense, and isn't explained. It's obviously just something you fed into Baidu Fanyi.
"Xuanwu borough named by xuanwu, comes from the north east of the period of the republic of China, because of the presidential palace, also known as the first area, is the political center of the republic of China" isn't English, makes no sense, and isn't explained. It's obviously just something you fed into Baidu Fanyi.
"Twenty years of the republic of China on March, to is divided into eight administrative region, today xuanwu borough in the first area, divided into districts ccba. Scene boundary in zhongshan road east, west, south of jiuhua mountain, zhongshan east road, north of area" isn't English, makes no sense, and isn't explained. It's obviously just something you fed into Baidu Fanyi.
"nanjing geography" ... "Greenland group" ... have no connection to anything else you wrote and are obviously just words you accidentally included in your copy/paste.

No, none of that counts towards any of your homework assignments. You have to use actual sentences with actual words that YOU understand and have placed in order.

Things you need to fix

Well, first, you need to actually write something. You cannot just copy/paste machine-translated garbage and think that it's ok.

You can write about a new topic, if you like. Anything still red is fine. You can also add to the Xuanwu District article.

Questions you didn't answer (in English, anyway):

How big is it in square kilometers?
What are the borders of Xuanwu District? What are the districts around it, in order?
You said there are about 625,000 people there. How do you know? and what year did they get the information?
What's its Chinese name?
What is its history? When was Xuanwu District set up? What was it before?
What are its special businesses?

You probably don't know those answers and you can look on Wikipedia or Baidu but you CANNOT just copy/paste their words, especially when they haven't been turned into English sentences. — Mr Spear (talk) 13:41, 28 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]