Talk:Greater prairie chicken

Work needed on this article

complex words/phrases: abundant, though, quite, rare, range, habitat, conservation, underway, sustain

incorrect wording: "The North American species were". There is only one species, so this should be singular, not plural.

Several sentences need to be split into shorter ones

The first sentence in the last paragraph needs grammar correction. It either is missing an article, or "bird" needs to be plural.

--Auntof6 (talk) 08:21, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

I've removed complex terms. Something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 09:08, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

Yes, take care of the remaining complex terms. Also divide the sentence that starts with "adults". --Auntof6 (talk) 09:29, 31 March 2015 (UTC)

I've removed some other complex words. Is there something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 00:07, 2 April 2015 (UTC)

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First, keep in mind that you have several options when simplifying complex words or phrases.

• You can change them to simpler words.
• You can link them if there is a relevant article.
• You can leave the word in and define it in parentheses after the word.
• You can remove them. This should be the last choice because meaning can be lost or changed.

Good job on dividing that last sentence. It's much better now.

The other changes you made didn't improve the article.

• Range sort of means area, but there's more to it than that. Making a direct change from one word to the other doesn't work: you'd need to add other words to explain more. You could do that, or you could link it.
• Removing the word habitat leaves the reader wondering what loss is being talked about. That needs to be explained somehow.
• Dividing underway into two words also doesn't work, because it's not correct English. Find a simple way of saying it.

A couple of things I didn't mention before:

• The phrase for the birds at the end of the first paragraph doesn't make sense. I'm not sure why you added that. It isn't in the enwiki article.
• A few more words in the article should be linked: extinct, population. Actually, though, population could be made simpler.

I'm going to repeat something I've said before. If you're going to simplify an article, first make sure you know what every part of it is saying. You have to understand that to know what words can be removed or replaced. If you don't understand every bit of what you're trying to simplify, then either learn more about the subject or pick something else. --Auntof6 (talk) 04:17, 2 April 2015 (UTC)

I've linked habitat and range. I may need help for the rest. Angela Maureen (talk) 05:43, 2 April 2015 (UTC)

I've linked the words population and extinct. Something else? Angela Maureen (talk) 05:21, 5 April 2015 (UTC)

I've struck out the things that have been taken care of. It looks like just the words abundant and rare are left. --Auntof6 (talk) 07:01, 5 April 2015 (UTC)

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With what word could I replace abundant? Angela Maureen (talk) 22:08, 5 April 2015 (UTC)