Talk:Funland (Rehoboth Beach, Delaware)

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Funland (Rehoboth Beach, Delaware)[change source]

This page is simplified enough. There's no advanced language in this article.— Preceding unsigned comment added by 108.48.147.41 (talkcontribs) 09:44, 27 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There are many words that are not simple enough, such as devastate, and sentences that are complex in structure (having multiple clauses)
The article is not written in an encyclopedic style and tone: entire sections such as the tickets and The Haunted Mansion sections are written in a very unencyclopedic manner, and look like original research.
Most importantly, is that this article is copied from the English Wikipedia — *Fehufangą✉ Talk page 09:53, 27 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I actually edited the original Wikipedia from an old version. Yes, I did transfer this from there. I thought the language was easy to understand. I thought the whole point is to talk about the park and say what it is. I'll try to simplify it better when I have some time. Thanks for pointing out what parts need to be looked at. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 09:57, 27 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Editing my revision now to simplify wording, remove stuff that's unnecessary, and to remove the source you requested I remove. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 03:16, 1 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I fixed the errors requested to be corrected. If there's any others needed to be corrected, please let me know so I can correct them. I would like to add a few pictures to the article but it won't let me do upload it, so if somebody is will to add it, please let me know as well, and I'll give you the link of the pic, or pics that I think should be added in. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 07:43, 1 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
As it is, the article is still unencyclopedic and not simple. — *Fehufangą✉ Talk page 01:29, 2 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I simplified all the words that I thought were more advanced. Thought I made it simple enough. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 06:10, 2 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I have reverted the article to the version I simplified. I will summarize the points raised in the English Wikipedia, as the content before my revert is essentially identical to the one in the English Wikipedia:
  • Adding an entire section about a single ride gives undue weight to that ride.
  • There is no need for an entire section about ticket prices
  • We seek not to appease the subject of the article. Wikipedia is not a travel guide.
I removed the tickets and haunted mansion section. If I have time I will simplify the history section from this version of the English Wikipedia article.
*Fehufangą✉ Talk page*Fehufangą✉ Talk page 00:29, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I have sought more input at WP:Simple Talk. — *Fehufangą✉ Talk page 00:34, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for seeking input. As for The Haunted Mansion, that’s the point, the Haunted Mansion is the ride they’re the most known for, so that’s why it deserves the extra attention. The ticket section isn’t let to appease Funland. It’s meant to inform readers on the pricing of tickets over time as no other amusement park, (that I know of), has tickets anywhere near what Funland did when it opened and especially now. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 00:56, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
And you have reverted back to the version which is contentious. Once again, the section about the haunted mansion has undue weight. By number of words, it is the biggest section - Microsoft Word counted 1155 words, while the history section only has 447 words. If you see examples from articles about other amusement parks, I guarantee none of them have a ticket section that detailed. See: Disney California Adventure, Happy Valley Shanghai for some examples. — *Fehufangą✉ Talk page 04:03, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'll take a look at some other attractions and see if any of them are close to how long The Haunted Mansion section is. I know it's detailed. I'll work to seeing if I can make the wording a bit less for the section. Haven't read too many Amusement Park, or Amusement Park Rides info on Wikipedia, so it's certainly possible that what I wrote for the Haunted Mansion exceeds most of if not all of them. Some attractions that come to mind that might similar to this might be Knobles or DisneyWorld for their Haunted Houses. I've not looked at those pages though, so I'm just saying this as my gut. I'll look at those attractions later this evening to see if they're anywhere near the length of The Haunted Mansion section. If they're not, then I got some thinking to do to see if I can try to condense it. I'll update you after I take a look. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 07:45, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Forgot to respond to what you said bout the tickets section. That may very well be true, but no other park that I know of has tickets anywhere near as low as Funland does. If you can find an example of a park that does, please let me know, and I'll remove the tickets section as it wouldn't serve the purpose that it currently does. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 07:51, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
OK, I conducted my research, and of the park I looked at 6 Flags, 6 Flags America, Knobles, Trimper's Rides, DisneyWorld and DisneyLand, none of them talk bout any of the rides surprisingly They list them, but I don't see any description about any of them. Not sure why. I did see a full article bout a Haunted Mansion for DisneyLand, and that had a walk through of the ride. in fact, the walk through for the DisneyLand ride was like double the length of my walk through. Again though, that was a page dedicated to a Haunted Mansion, not a sub section of a page. Based on this, I for sure have to try to see if I can somehow condense The Haunted Manson section. I'll see what I can do bout that when I have some time. Interestingly enough though, I did find a ticket section on the Disneyland page with actually more detail than I did for Funland. They also did a chart for the tickets. I guess that something I could try to, turn the Tickets section into a chart instead of multiple paragraphs. Think I should try to do that? So you can see what I'm referring to, here's the link to the article https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Disneyland. Let me know know your thoughts, thanks. 108.48.147.41 (talk) 09:23, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]