User talk:Golden-crocodile Tony

Old account names

Tony's other account names include User:Iron-Shark Tony and User:Iron-crocodile Tony. Only also mentioned an "L-RON KNIGHT", "Gentlemen", and "AN STRONG LRON KNIGHT" but I can't find them now. There are old comments at User talk:Iron-Shark Tony and User talk:Iron-crocodile Tony. If their edit history could be moved here, Tony's old accounts can be deleted since he doesn't and shouldn't use them any more. He can agree to that the next time he visits. — Mr Spear (talk) 01:46, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Romance of the Three Kingdoms

This week, you wrote:

"The Romance of the Three Kingdoms" is one of the Four Classic Books in China. It can devide into five parts. They are The Yellow Turban insurrectionary disorderly, Dong zhuo's disorderly, Feudal Lords vying for the throne, the three tripartite confrontation and the Three Kindoms belonged to Jin.

There are some big problems with this. This isn't English. You took a Chinese paragraph, used Baidu Translation (百度翻译), and put it here. Do NOT do that. Use words you know and write your own thoughts. If you don't know how to say something, do NOT use Baidu Translation. Look for the Chinese name on the big English Wikipedia or use your own words to explain (解释) it. You don't need to say "It can be divided into five parts"; you can say "It has five parts". You don't need to say "the Yellow Turban Disorder" and "Dong Zhuo's Disorder"; you can say "the Yellow Turbans Make Trouble" and "Dong Zhuo Makes Trouble". You don't know "vying", but you know "fighting". You don't know "tripartite" but you know "Three-Way" or "Three-Part".

USE YOUR OWN WORDS, even if you have to say it a different, easier way.

You also could have looked for the article on Romance of the Three Kingdoms and written there.

Do you see the smaller mistakes yourself? See if you can see them. If not, click "show" on the right.

Smaller problems:

It doesn't have five parts. It has 120 parts. The first time you write the name of an article, it should be bold. You do that by using three marks on each side: '''The Romance of the Three Kingdoms'''. The names of big pieces of art like books and movies don't use quote marks like "this". They use underlines like this or italics like this. Here, you should use italics by using two marks on each side: ''The Romance of the Three Kingdoms''. The first time you write the name of the article, you would use both and there would be five marks on each side: '''''The Romance of the Three Kingdoms. There are some spelling mistakes: devide is be divided; zhuo is a name: Zhou; Kindoms is Kingdoms.

 — Mr Spear (talk) 11:22, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Romance of the Three Kingdoms

Last week, you wrote

"Romance of the Three Kingdoms" is one of the four classic books in China. Tt's written by Luo Guanzhong, a famous Chinese writer and novelist. It's China's first long defects in historical novel. It's about the last of East Han to the West Jin and the Three Kingdoms: Shu, Wei, Wu. Shu is clever. Wei is strong, but Wu is the other.

This is better. You say the name of the author and talk about what happens in the story.

We talked about how to fix these mistakes in class. Did you write it down in your notebook? You should put it here. — Mr Spear (talk) 11:41, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Baizhanji

Two weeks ago, you wrote

Baizhanji is a kind of Shanghainese food. It's a kind of cooked chicks.It can be eaten with soup, sauce and so on. Most of the people call it Xiaoshaoxin Baizhanji. The reason is:in the summer in 1940,a sixteen-year-boy fleed to Shanghai for some reason. He wanted to get money to live .First, he bought some ducks' foot and processed them. Then, he got some money and bought a small shop. He made some Baizhanji. And the last name of this food is Xiaoshaoxin's reason is the boy came from Shaoxin.

This is better. You're using your own words. There are some mistakes, but you can just look at them and try to be better next time. Little by little your English will be better and better.

The big mistake is that you tell a long story about why the food sometimes has a boy's name but you never (1) tell his name, (2) explain the food's real name, (3) give the Chinese characters for the name, or (4) explain what makes the chicken different from any other chicken.

Do you see the smaller mistakes yourself? See if you can see them. If not, click "show" on the right.

Smaller problems:

You have some spaces in the wrong place or forget to write them. Baizhanji is a kind of Shanghainese food. It's ❚a kind of cooked chicks.❚It can be eaten with soup, sauce and so on. Most of the people call it Xiaoshaoxin Baizhanji. The reason is:❚in the summer in 1940,❚a sixteen-year-boy fleed to Shanghai for some reason. He wanted to get money to live❚.❚First, he bought some ducks' foot and processed them. Then, he got some money and bought a small shop. He made some Baizhanji. And the last name of this food is Xiaoshaoxin's reason is the boy came from Shaoxin. "Chicks" are not a cooking material. They are baby chickens. It's not really a kind of "cooked chicken", is it? You should say it's a kind of "chicken dish" (菜). What kind of soup? What kind of sauce? You don't need to say "and so on" because it's not clear what the first part is talking about. "Most of the people" means most of some special people... but we weren't talking about anyone yet. You really mean "most people"... but which people? People in Shanghai? "Most Shanghainese people..." In the "summer of 1940", he would have "fled" to Shanghai "from Shaoxing" because of World War II. If he needs the money to live, he needs the money. He doesn't just want it. Feet are countable. In Chinese 和, 但, and 因为 can start sentences but, in English, "and", "but", and "because" should always be part of a bigger sentence with a comma (逗号) and space in front of it.

 — Mr Spear (talk) 11:22, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

The Romance of the Three Kingdoms

"The Romance of the Three Kingdoms" is my favourite book. I want to talk about the Five Tiger Generals. They are: Guan Yu, Zhang Fei, Zhao Yun, Ma Chao and Huang Zhong. They all work for the emperor of Shu Han, Liu Bei. Guan Yu is the God of War . He is the most powerful person in story. Zhang Fei is strong and looks humorous. Zhao Yun is handsome and brave. He is the clevererst. Ma Chao has the best statu when he was born, and he is very famous in Qiang people. Huang Zhong is the oldest, he is good at shooting by bow and arrows.

GuanYu

Today I am going to talk about my favourite general in "The Romance of the Three Kingdoms". His name is GuanYu(161－220). He is strong and powerful, and the most important thing is he is the God of Wars. He did a lot of famous things.Such as use the water flooded seven roads of armies. He used water to kill a lot of armies in Wei. As you can see, he is both clever and powerful. Isn't he?

Zhang Fei

Today I'm going to talk about the most funny person in "The Romance of The Three Kingdoms", Zhang Fei. He did a lot of important things for Shu. Such as pretended to make Cao Cao scared, defeated Lu Bu with his too brothers, he also defeated Zhang He, a general in Wei by himself. As you can see, he is sometimes clever but always brave.

Jiuyin

Huainanzi is a very classic book in China. It's about ancient myths. Today I will talk about Jiuyin. It's a monster with nine heads. It calls like a baby. It can make fire and water. It likes eating people when the water burn.

Ninja

Today I will talk about a special Japanese job, [ninja]. In short, they are super spys. They wear dark blue or black clothes. They fight for their employer.Their weapons are syuriken, makibisi, shinobigatana, hukiya, sikomidue, tekkoukagi, mizugumo, bow, kunai and so on. I hope you will like this passage.

ZhuGeliang

Today I will talk about the cleverest man in"The Romance of the Three Kingdoms", ZhuGeliang(181-234). He fought for Shu. He has two brothers. One of them was in Wu and the other one was in Wei.People say that Shu got the dragon, Wu got the tiger and Wei got the dog.

Presentation

Our teacher wanted me to give a presentation. Remember, I am a student in Grade Six in China. I prepared a lot about my presentation. My PPT was really well-made. At that time, I was talking about our class. I learned a lot when I finished my presentation and others finished it as well. If you want to do your presentation well, I will give you some suggestions: First, prepare well. If you really did that well, you will be so confident. Actors need that, it's real. Second, speak as loud as you can. And the audience will listen attentively to you. Third, be modest. Presentation is for praticing English, not display Engish. At last, remember to say something polite, just like "Thanks for listening!".I hope you will like it.

'Shanhaijin'

Today I'm going to talk about 'Shanhaijin', a famous book which was written in ancient China. It was about some special animals or called monsters. Until now we also don't know whether the monsters in Shanhaijin are real. And we are still wondered who wrote it, we just know the writter was in ancient China.

Something about Marvel

There is a new film which is called "Thor3". There was a super bad woman, Hela, the goddess of death. She was created in 'Journey into Mystery'. She was Loki 's daughter, but in the film, she was Odin's daughter, Loki and Thor's sister. She was free when Odin died. She defeat Thor and Loki in seconds. They had no idea how powerful she was. She broke Thor's weapon and one of Thor's eyes. She was killed by the other powerful and super giant monster, which has a giant sword.

Avengers 3

Avengers is going to on in our country. Spiderman, Iron man and Captain America will be in the film, I hope I can see it.

Sabretooth

Sabretoothis a man who was built by "Marvel". He has very hard teeth and hands. He can save himself by something in his body.

Skull the Slayer

Skull the Slayer is a man who was built by "Marvel". His real name is James Scully. James Scully was a strong army. He was passed a sentence because of a murder by him. Bust the plane crashed at a point which nobody knew in "Burmuda Triangle". He got a "power belt". So he became powerful.

Bonebreaker

Bonebreaker is a half-robot.He has no legs but electricity tank track chassis which has a lot of weapons on it. Such as rockets and minigun... He is good at using guns. If his electricity tank track chassis is broken, his up-body can leave it easily if it is not broken.

Arcade

Arcade is a character who was built by "Marvel". He is also called Mister A, Pinball Wizard and Mad Monk. He is very clever. He is good at robots and buildings, he is also a desigher. Because of his lazyness, his father refused to give him any money, so he killed his father and became a murderer. He used his father's money to build a high-tech amusement park with tools for killing. It's called 'Murderworlds'.

Man-Ape

Man-Ape is a character who was built by "Marvel". His real name is M'Baku. He is also called White Gorilla. At one point, M'Baku killed a white gorilla for worship and he became a white gorilla

Wish-Demon

Wish-Demon is a character who was built by "Marvel". He has the power which can satisfy one's wish by bad ways.

Zarathos

Zarathos is a character who was built by "Marvel". He is also called Ravengers of Souls, Ghost Rider and so on. He is a demon. He can use hellfire to fight, it can eat somebody and make somebody on fire. Zarathos uses the people who believe in him to get power.

Killmonger

Killmonger is a character who was built by "Marvel". He ate some grass and became super. He can invent weapons.

Armorer

Armorers are a kind of people who were built by "Marvel". They are also called Zahgurim's servant. They are strong soldiers. Their normal weapons are two Sumerian Ritual Execution Blades. They grow stronger when they kill people.

Hellstorm("Marvel")

Hellstorm is also called Antichrist, Black Halo, the Devil and King of Hell. He has very strong and mystical power and his embracers can make him stronger. he can use hellfire to attack others' spirit. He can also use power to break the buildings. He is all-round in the Hell. His weapon is atrident. He joined Defenders to fight his father,Satan.

Blood Brothers("Marvel")

Blood Brothers are twins. They are fast, powerful and good at close combat. Their muscel make them never feel tired. Because they are twins, it causes their power. If they are near, they are most strong. They came from Roclites. They have red skin. They are cool and strong lansquenets. They were Thanos's friends once.